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In an ancient universe not known to us, stories are mirrored by reality, and stories are known to intertwine. The land of Arkure is one such example of this from this universe. Multiple millennia ago, Arceus created the world of Arkure with three dimensions. The Temporal, Spacial, and Arcane Dimensions each were created with guardians; Dialga, Palkia, and Giratina, respectively. In the current era of time, the center city of Arkure, Camelot, is ruled by King Uther Pendragon. The 30 year reign has been marked with the king's actions to eradicate anything that has to do with the Arcane, deeming all magic as Dark Magic and all who practice it as evil. He has even gone as far as trying to eradicate Pokemon that resemble creatures of arcane power. His fear of magic has turned into hatred and paranoia, and he will stop at nothing to protect his kingdom. The King has many loyal subjects, though many of them want a new king. There are also many that despise him and plot to dethrone him. Despite Uther's efforts to rid Camelot of all magic, many still practice it, be it for good or evil. Few that are loyal subjects practice good magic. Many dark sorcerers live in secret, strengthening their knowledge of the Old Religion and plotting ways to overthrow the king. Legend says that the true king of Camelot will reveal himself when the time is right, and may believe that Arthur is the true king.

Arthurian Themes:

  • King Uther
  • Arthur(Non-noble)
  • Merlin
  • Morgana(Ally)
  • Guinevere
  • Mordred may or may not be part; do not apply to be him
  • Magic, Enchantments, Sorcerers, and Myths
  • Uther has prohibited the use of anything arcane(magical)
  • Arthurian weapons, armor, and knights
  • Camelot is the main "hub area"
  • Possible inclusion of alchemy
Pokemon Themes
  • Legend of Arceus is true
  • Dialga governs the Temporal Dimension, Palkia governs the Spacial Dimension, and Giratina governs the Arcane Dimension
  • Ghost Pokemon are sometimes seen as Arcane and certain kinds are prohibited from the kingdom
  • Nonexistence of pokeballs; Pokemon are not captured
  • Possible inclusion of Burt-like technology(Something that allows people to merge with Pokemon); This would fit with
  • Most items from the original Pokemon universe do not exist
"Factions"
IMPORTANT INFO:These are not meant to create groups for characters to know each other by. If you are apart of a faction, you are not a "member." Many Arkure Rebels do not know each other, they may not even know eachother's stances.
  • Royals
                -King Uther and his loyal council, along with the authorities of Camelot and most of the knights. This "faction" rules over Camelot and stands by Uther. Any characters of this group will stick to the laws of Camelot and will stop at nothing to protect the peace of the kingdom.
  • Citizens
                -The normal townsfolk of the kingdom, as well as the nobles that are not on any side. Includes normal citizens from outside of Camelot.
  • True Arkurians
                -Those who secretly continue to use magic. They do not necessarily want to dethrone Uther, but their ultimate goal is to have Arthur set up as King of Camelot. Most still serve the king as loyal citizens, but they practice good magic in secret. Some still have Ghost Pokemon, but keep them hidden.
  • Keystone Souls
                -The sorcerers who fully oppose Uther. However, they are the reason that he wants to destroy all magic. They are powerful magicians that use Dark Magic; calling upon the powers of both Dark and Ghost Pokemon. Very few live in the city; most reside outside the city walls in secret, in caves, forests, and even underneath the city itself.

The World of Akure:
Kingdoms:
 --Camelot
   -City of Camelot: Medieval City with walls surrounding palace and palace grounds. Residential grounds surround the palace walls, along with the marketplace. That area is also surrounded by a wall. The main gate is on the southern-most part of both walls. Guards are posted everywhere around the city, as well as inside the palace.
   -Plains: The gate opens unto a section of plains for a mile south.
   -Forests: Trees surround the city walls and the plains. Multiple caves open up within the forest.
   -Mount Axion: This mountain stands a day's journey North of the city.
   -Isle of Blessings: A mysterious island beyond Mount Axion. The island is the ruin of an ancient palace, and legend says that it is the heart of the "Old Religion." Legend also says that a powerful Pokemon resides on the island, though no one has ever seen it. Very few ever venture to the island anyway. The courtyard at the center of the island has a pedestal which holds the Cup of Life.
   -Fort Axion: A stone fort that lies at the foot of the mountain. The place is a known bandit camp; it has not been used by Camelot's military forces for half a century.
   -Daernea: A village beyond the forest. A half-mile's journey West is needed to get there.
   -Keatna: A village beyond the forest. A half-mile's journey East is needed to get there.
 --Shivekdis: A kingdom far Southwest of Camelot
   -City of Shivekdis: A city completely surrounded by stone. The entire city is an interior covered by a stone roof and stone walls. The citizens are hardly to be called civil at all. As opposed to the honorable and clean-shaven people of Camelot, the people of Shivekdis are dirty, ragged, and completely rude. The men have complete disrespect of women and are obsessed with fighting, eating, and sleeping. All the citizens wear ragged, dirty clothes made of furs and hides.
   -Shiv Forests: The mountainous forest region in between Daernea and Shivekdis
   -Tennior Tunnels: Tunnels beneath the forests that cut the journey to Shivekdis in half. However, the tunnels are filled with Wildren.
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« Reply #1 on: February 22, 2013, 08:47:19 pm »

Arthur, Guinevere, and Morgana are open for use by others. Do not edit out what is already in the preset forms for them below. The "X"s mean that you can add to what is there.

Character Form

Name:
Gender:
Faction:
Magical Prowess(Scale of 0-10):
Pokemon(If any, up to 3[NO LEGENDARIES EXCEPT BY REQUEST]Also, feel free to elaborate on the descriptions of your Pokemon. Their descriptions can play a big part of the story):
Residence:
Occupation(If your character is not employed, put None, Unemployed, or Retired[For instance, a "Mage" would be None):
Age:
Appearance:
Battle Armor:
Weapons(If any):
Important Details:
Player:



Name: Merlin
Gender: Male
Faction: Arkure Rebels
Magical Prowess: 6
Pokemon
Shedinja: Merlin found it abandoned in the forest when he first came to Camelot. He originally just intended to nurse it back to health, thinking it was sick, although what he thought were symptoms were just natural traits. He then realized the power that Shedinja had and decided to keep it because of its immunities.
Metang: It stays outside of the city, living in a cave just West of the gate. Merlin doesn't see it much.
Linoone: Merlin has kept Linoone since his boyhood days, when it was just a Zigzagoon. Linoone follows him throughout the city, but often stays home when Merlin ventures outside the walls. It has a pickpocket streak that sometimes gets Merlin into trouble.
Residence: Lives with the Court physician, Gaius
Occupation: Physician's assistant
Age: 19
Appearance: Tall. Short, black hair. Caucasian. Blue eyes. A blue shirt with a brown jacket. Red scarf often bound around neck.
Battle Armor: Merges with Shedinja to equip himself with Wonder Guard Armor
Weapons: A steel dagger
Important Details: This is a younger version of the well-known Merlin, and he is still learning mastery over his arcane gifts. Based off of the protagonist of BBC's "The Adventures of Merlin." Merlin lives with Gaius; he is an orphan.
Player: Cooper

Name: Gaius
Gender: Male
Faction: Citizens
Magical Prowess(Scale of 0-10): 3
Pokemon
Parasect: Gaius uses its spores to create antidotes for certain diseases and poisons.
Meganium: Because of its pleasing aroma, it stays within Gaius's office to help calm patients. It rarely leaves the office, but sometimes Gaius needs it elsewhere. It also preserves Gaius's stocks of herbs; its breath has the power to heal plant life.
Residence: His room in the palace
Occupation: Court Physician(Doctor)
Age: 68
Appearance: A medium-sized, elderly Caucasian man. Long, light blonde hair. Light blue eyes. Wears a brown robe with a pattern on the edges.
Battle Armor: None
Weapons: Steel Dagger
Important Details: He is not Merlin's father, but he has taken care of him for a few years since Merlin had become an orphan. Gaius practiced some magic before Uther became king, but he stopped his practice and focused more on anatomy and medicine. Uther turns to Gaius for advice most of the time. Gaius holds secrets, even from Merlin. He doesn't want Merlin to practice magic, except when it is important. He is also very cautious, often trying to prevent people from doing dangerous things.
Player: Cooper

Name: King Uther
Gender: Male
Faction: Royals
Magical Prowess: 0
Pokemon
Dragonair: Uther doesn't actually have much use for Dragonair. He has trained her for more than thirty years, though, since she was a Dratini. She most often remains in the palace. If Uther goes on a journey by himself, he will ride her, but that rarely occurs.
Residence: Palace
Occupation: King of Camelot
Age: 55
Appearance: Short, gray hair. Tall and Caucasian. Light green eyes. Wears a dark brown jacket and a red cape. Also a crown.
Battle Armor: Chain mail with steel plates over shoulders and right arm. Red and gold cloth cover his armor, marked with the seal of Camelot; a gold dragon. His shield bears the same cloth.
Weapons: Steel sword.
Important Details: Before his reign started, something happened that created his complete prejudice against magic today. He is very paranoid about magic, and he will execute anyone that has anything to do with magic, no matter who they are. He is selfish and he abuses his powers, often throwing anyone who insults or challenges him into the dungeons for the night or into the stocks to be pelted with vegetables by the townsfolk.
[Also, he is the absolute monarch of Camelot. I may godmod or whatever with him, but that's kind of the point of the roleplay. He's in charge no matter how corrupt he is.]
Player: Cooper

Name: Nimueh
Gender: Female
Faction: Keystone Souls
Magical Prowess(Scale of 0-10): 9
Pokemon
Hydreigon: Nimueh's steed and guardian. It's power is greater than most, and many consider it a legend.
Spiritomb: The being of the Keystone, the Pokemon that lies behind the source of Dark Magic. It is truly immortal, though it may fall in battle. Nimueh does not own it in any sense, but it was summoned by her, and she is the only human that it trusts.
Hypno: Though she rarely employs him, Nimueh uses him to hypnotize victims for her plots.
Residence: She does not have an exact home, but she mostly stays in the caves beneath Camelot and on the Isle of Blessings.
Occupation: None
Age: ??(Possibly a century at least)
Appearance: A pretty, young woman with beautiful blue eyes and dark hair. She wears a red tattered dress.
Battle Armor: None
Weapons(If any): None
Important Details: She is a very powerful sorceress that practices ancient magic. She has caused many problems for Camelot. She was once a friend of Uther, but she was exiled when his prejudice began.
Player: Cooper


Characters open to be taken by others("X" is anything editable)
Before you apply to be them, please PM me and ask if you can play as them. I want someone who I know will be dedicated to using them.

Name: Arthur
Gender: Male
Faction: Arkure Rebels
Magical Prowess(Scale of 0-10): 0
Pokemon(If any, up to 3[NO LEGENDARIES EXCEPT BY REQUEST]): Cobalion, X, X
Residence: X
Occupation(If your character is not employed, put None, Unemployed, or Retired[For instance, a "Mage" would be None): X
Age: 20
Appearance: Tall, brown-haired, Caucasian, blue eyes. X
Battle Armor: X
Weapons(If any): X
Important Details: He is Merlin's best friend. Most of those that oppose the king want Arthur to take Uther's place.
Player: X

Name: Morgana
Gender: Female
Faction: Citizens/Arkure Rebels
Magical Prowess(Scale of 0-10): 4
Pokemon(If any, up to 3[NO LEGENDARIES EXCEPT BY REQUEST]): Natu, X, X
Residence: X
Occupation(If your character is not employed, put None, Unemployed, or Retired[For instance, a "Mage" would be None): X
Age: 19
Appearance: Beautiful woman with alluring, green eyes and dark hair. X
Battle Armor: X
Weapons(If any): X
Important Details: She is almost as powerful as Merlin when it comes to magic, but she is more knowledgeable about sword-fighting then him. She has a secret gift, but not even she knows about it. X
Player: X

Name: Guinevere(Gwen)
Gender: Female
Faction: X
Magical Prowess(Scale of 0-10): 0
Pokemon(If any, up to 3[NO LEGENDARIES EXCEPT BY REQUEST]): Happiny, X, X
Residence: X
Occupation(If your character is not employed, put None, Unemployed, or Retired[For instance, a "Mage" would be None): X
Age: 19
Appearance: X
Battle Armor: X
Weapons(If any): X
Important Details: She often helps Gaius with his duties; her Happiny helps a lot.
Player: X
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« Reply #2 on: February 22, 2013, 08:47:42 pm »

Important Pokemon

  • Giratina
     -It resides in the Torn Void, a place created by the powers of the dark arcane. Uther trapped it within that world to keep it from helping the sorcerers that he wished to eradicate. However, some sorcerers still can speak with Giratina, Merlin being one of them. Giratina has the power of speech and can speak to those who are able to access the Torn Void. It has much knowledge and can sometimes see what happens in Camelot, though it doesn't always reveal what it knows.
  • Arthur's Cobalion
     -A Pokemon summoned by Nimueh for Arthur. It hides itself in the forest, away from humans, but will reveal itself for Arthur and sometimes, for those that Arthur trusts. It wears a leather sash around its neck that has inscriptions on it. On the right shoulder, it translates to "Take me up." On the left, it translates to "Cast me away."
  • Also, certain Pokemon that aren't legendary can still be seen as one of a kind or very rare. Pokemon like Zorua, Zoroark, Dragonair, and Lucario
  • A note on Ditto, Zorua, and Zoroark-Their shape-shifting powers will definitely be seen as dark magic, so they need to be hidden if owned, even though they are not legendary.
  • Onix, Steelix, Gyarados, and Wailord are out of the question.

    Some notes on Pokemon powers
    Try not to use names when describing abilities and attacks; try to be more descriptive but unspecific when describing an attack. Instead of "Charmander used Flamethrower!" say something like "Charmander spat fire from his mouth at the enemy, catching them on fire." Instead of "Metang's Clear Body prevented its stats from lowering." say something like "Metang's inner power prevented it from weakening."
    Pokemon do not have to be limited to four attacks in this, but don't go overboard with the amount of powers that they have. Pokemon don't have to limited to a single ability; they can have access to the other abilities possible for their species.
    Please don't completely rely on using the powers of Pokemon, they are meant to be companions more than super-powered battle pets.
    Please also limit the abilities and attacks you use so that your Pokemon aren't calling meteors from the sky, or creating huge torrents of water, or blasting away buildings and trees. Sorcerers should probably be the only ones calling down thunderstorms or generating tornadoes as well.
    A sorcerer could summon a Pokemon powerful enough to use attacks like that, though.

    Some notes on magic
    Limit your use of magic to the level that you choose. For instance, a level 1 sorcerer would only be able to make something small move with their mind, or maybe change the color of something. A level 4 could probably enchant a weapon with an element. A level 7 could use self-levitation or conjure a thunderstorm.
    After a while, a sorcerer will learn more magic, so your level can definitely change, just not within a day's time. It will take a while for a level to increase.
    Very powerful sorcerers may be able to summon legendary Pokemon or significantly powerful Pokemon like Dusknoir or Slaking.
    Also, all magic is summoned by some sort of "chant." Any character using magic intentionally must at least whisper some sort of chant. There need not be any defined words, just at least a sound.

    The "Burst" Technique
    This technique can be used, but let's not give it a name, just say that you merged with a Pokemon. Also, it must only be used by sorcerers with at least a level 4 or 5 power.
    Try not to completely "merge" your character with the Pokemon. Really, the Pokemon should become an armor or clothing of some sort.
    However, your character can still use the powers and ability of the morphed Pokemon.
    Sorcerers can also merge a Pokemon with a different character instead of themselves.
    Sorcerers with at least a level 8 can merge with more than one Pokemon.
    Let me give an example of the version of the ability that can be used:

    Merlin stepped behind a tree as Arthur distracted the Carnivine. After taking one look back to make sure he had a moment, he muttered a magic chant. Shedinja, floating beside him, started glowing. It morphed into a ball of light and grew to a much larger size. The light wrapped around Merlin, covering him. The light started disappearing and Merlin remained with a set of bronze and iron armor covering him. His helmet was all bronze and looked just like the head of Shedinja, with a rotated, white, crescent moon marking the forehead. His chest and legs were covered by iron chain mail, and bronze plates rested on his arms and shoulders. Instead of carrying a shield, his forearms both bared half of a shield that fit together when he held his arms side-by-side.
    After he equipped his armor, he jumped back into battle to see the Carnivine with some vines wrapped around Arthur's sword while Arthur tried to fight back with his shield. Merlin jumped at the Pokemon, forming his arms into an "X." His arms shone with a brief flash as he borrowed Shedinja's power, striking down on Carnivine. The Grass Pokemon took the full blow, and it fainted from the attack.
    Arthur peeled the vines off of his sword. "Glad you finally joined the fight." Arthur grumbled as he sheathed his sword.
    Merlin lifted the front part of his helmet, revealing his face. "You're welcome."
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« Reply #3 on: February 23, 2013, 10:52:46 am »

I should probably warn that large Pokemon won't be very wise unless they live outside of homes or outside of the town. Pokemon don't have to always follow, but I imagine that smaller Pokemon will follow their humans around, sometimes even larger Pokemon.
I imagine something like this as possible: A merchant living in the residential area that has a Yanma and a Bidoof that follow him to his stand everyday and help him.
This is what I don't see possible but it might be applied for: An adventurer with a Blaziken, a Hariyama, and a Rhyperior that lives in the city.
1 The Blaziken is alright for someone who lives in the city; it's a good size
2 The Hariyama and the Rhyperior wouldn't work even by themselves for living in the city, always barging through the marketplace every time the adventurer came home.
3 If he lived outside of Camelot, this team would be okay, however
4 Really, though, a Rhyperior would be seen as a Pokemon of great power and might actually be seen as a legendary because of how rare and powerful it is. It would be best if Pokemon like that weren't used at all except for being summoned by a sorcerer.
5 Also, since one of the themes is that many items from the Pokemon World don't exist in this world, that should be taken into account with determining what Pokemon to use. For instance, A Magmarizer would not be found in this world, so how would someone acquire a Magmortar without magic?
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« Reply #4 on: February 23, 2013, 11:47:39 am »

1 I said don't apply yet
2 Magic is banned so how could your character have an occupation as a mage if he lives in Camelot? Plus, his description and his appearance make him seem too obvious as a sorcerer; Uther would have executed him at first sight of any magical powers, even if he was just a child. He can stay that way if he lives outside of the city of Camelot, maybe in a village on the outskirts of the kingdom.
3 It's alright if he has a Duskull, but make sure he keeps it hidden.

1. Crap, sorry >.>

2. I'll change that.

3. I was planning on keeping him hidden.
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« Reply #5 on: February 24, 2013, 06:41:21 pm »

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Name:
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Faction: True Arkurians
Magical Prowess(Scale of 0-10): 10
Pokemon(If any, up to 3[NO LEGENDARIES EXCEPT BY REQUEST]Also, feel free to elaborate on the descriptions of your Pokemon. Their descriptions can play a big part of the story): Zoura, Grovelyle. and Alakazam. Bios:Zoura: A smart but mischievous pokemon, used to trick others for information when needed. Was  found injured in the wilderness and took a liking to me when i helped it. Grovelyle: A strong willed pokemon, is fast and clever.  Alakazam: A knowledgeable pokemon, communicates using telepathy techniques. Is very fast and helpful in improving magic. Alakazam evolved after spending it's whole childhood with me as an Abra.
Residence: Camelot
Occupation(If your character is not employed, put None, Unemployed, or Retired[For instance, a "Mage" would be None): unemployed.
Age: 20
Appearance: Tall, brown haired, wears a blue cape and a blue mask when needed for a disguise.
Battle Armor: Creates a psychic armor with Alakazam's help.
Weapons(If any): Fights with a crystal staff that controls his magic.
Important Details: Is one of the highest ranked magic users. smart and friendly.
Player: Zoroark

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« Reply #7 on: February 24, 2013, 09:28:27 pm »

Did i do this right cooper?

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Name:
Gender: Male
Faction: True Arkurians
Magical Prowess(Scale of 0-10): 10
Pokemon(If any, up to 3[NO LEGENDARIES EXCEPT BY REQUEST]Also, feel free to elaborate on the descriptions of your Pokemon. Their descriptions can play a big part of the story): Zorua, chespin( can i have gen 6 pokemon?) and alakazam. Bios: Zorua: A smart but mischievous Pokemon, used to trick others for information when needed. Was found injured in the wilderness and took a liking to me when i helped it. Chespin: will be filled in if i can have him. Alakazam: A knowledgeable Pokemon, communicates using telepathy techniques. Is very fast and helpful in improving magic. Alakazam evolved after spending it's whole childhood with me as an Abra.
Residence: Camelot
Occupation(If your character is not employed, put None, Unemployed, or Retired[For instance, a "Mage" would be None): unemployed.
Age: 20
Appearance: Tall, brown haired, friendly and smart. Wears a blue cape and a blue mask when needed for a disguise.
Battle Armor: Creates a psychic armor with Alakazam's help.
Weapons(If any): Fights with a crystal staff that controls his magic.
Important Details: One of the highest ranked magic users in the group. Friendly and smart.
Player: zoroark

The boldened parts are the things that I noticed first. Capitalization and correct spelling will get you far, my friend.
I grayed out what you should take out; anything in parentheses in a form is usually something that can be removed.
No, you cannot have a Generation 6 Pokemon.
If a form has "Appearance," it is asking for what the character looks like, not their personality. You should put those kind of details in in "Important Details."
And finally, the True Arkurians are not to be looked at as an actual "group," as I said in the first post. The Factions part is really just so that we know your stance in the plot, so don't compare yourself to others in the group, since it's not a group.

Also, some suggestions on the Pokemon and powers(I'm most likely going to give these to everyone).
Zorua: A Pokemon of myth and trickery. Keep it hidden. A Pokemon like this will be seen as that of an evil sorcerer.
Alakazam: Be careful with its powers; don't go overboard.
Since you're character is level 10, I expect him to be a wise and intelligent character. I also hope that you won't let his powers go too crazy either, since he's such a prodigy excelling past even a century-old sorceress(Nimueh is only level 9) at only age 20.

Are you going to use first-person for your narrative?
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« Reply #8 on: February 25, 2013, 03:27:13 pm »

A few things that need fixed, I'll show you what I mean
The boldened parts are the things that I noticed first. Capitalization and correct spelling will get you far, my friend.
I grayed out what you should take out; anything in parentheses in a form is usually something that can be removed.
No, you cannot have a Generation 6 Pokemon.
If a form has "Appearance," it is asking for what the character looks like, not their personality. You should put those kind of details in in "Important Details."
And finally, the True Arkurians are not to be looked at as an actual "group," as I said in the first post. The Factions part is really just so that we know your stance in the plot, so don't compare yourself to others in the group, since it's not a group.

Also, some suggestions on the Pokemon and powers(I'm most likely going to give these to everyone).
Zorua: A Pokemon of myth and trickery. Keep it hidden. A Pokemon like this will be seen as that of an evil sorcerer.
Alakazam: Be careful with its powers; don't go overboard.
Since you're character is level 10, I expect him to be a wise and intelligent character. I also hope that you won't let his powers go too crazy either, since he's such a prodigy excelling past even a century-old sorceress(Nimueh is only level 9) at only age 20.

Are you going to use first-person for your narrative?

Sorry for the spelling i didn't know i would need capitals for the outline. Also i  can keep Zoura hidden. I won't go overboard with my powers or Alakazam's either.  I fixed up the outline, is it good now?
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« Reply #9 on: February 25, 2013, 04:15:54 pm »

Sorry for the spelling i didn't know i would need capitals for the outline. Also i  can keep Zoura hidden. I won't go overboard with my powers or Alakazam's either.  I fixed up the outline, is it good now?

Alright, it's fine. We definitely need more people though.
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« Reply #10 on: February 25, 2013, 04:42:34 pm »

Ya, we will need quite a few. It should catch on though and have more people involved in it soon.
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« Reply #11 on: February 25, 2013, 05:16:28 pm »

It should catch on though and have more people involved in it soon.
I doubt that
Everybody else has an incredibly lazy attitude to rping.
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« Reply #12 on: February 25, 2013, 05:58:19 pm »

I doubt that
Everybody else has an incredibly lazy attitude to rping.

Hm then if that is true my statement may be incorrect.
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« Reply #13 on: February 25, 2013, 06:03:22 pm »

Hm then if that is true my statement may be incorrect.
I've tried for years to get this board going and every time it seems like something could happen, it all falls down because most of the people here sadly cannot commit (Only Frank and I have exhibited any effort in that time) to doing at least one post a day or two for a long period of time.  They just forget they signed up.  It's upsetting, I devoted so much to it and it's been for naught..
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« Reply #14 on: February 25, 2013, 07:28:56 pm »

I've tried for years to get this board going and every time it seems like something could happen, it all falls down because most of the people here sadly cannot commit (Only Frank and I have exhibited any effort in that time) to doing at least one post a day or two for a long period of time.  They just forget they signed up.  It's upsetting, I devoted so much to it and it's been for naught..

There's a lot of stuff going on in my life, and the stress isn't helping with my writer's block .-.
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